Your problem is that you didn’t present just a critique of Socialism, you veered into praising Capitalism unnecessarily (which means a new system was introduced uncritically).

The metaphor for socialism would be that the one party controls the means of production, and that under true socialism there’d be a pile of dead spiders (heros and villains of the revolutionary period), and the web (which defines this epoch’s age of technology) would escape the glass.

Possibly the most educated spider from the party’s politburo would be able to step out of the glass… They would then climb into the next glass and try to foment a revolution there.

But all of the above is still dealing in an archiac propagandists ghost of 1950s Socialism (which wasn’t even like that to begin with)… And many parts of it are in fact a better critique of modern Capitalism with its industrial powerhouses forming monopolies and cartels interoperating with governments, and the culture industry to press people into further wealth disparity and corrupt democracy until it simulates a one party set of state Capitalist values.